Rachel Sarah Smith

[kyogirl]

Rachel SarahSmith


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- - Full name: Rachel Sarah Smith
- - Nick names: Rach
- - Age:21
- - Birthday:March 3
- - Hometown:Kentucky
- - Current Location: Wynfield is located in Caledon, Ontario.
- - Occupation: show rider
- - Sexuality:bisexual
- - Face Claim: Kelly Clarkson

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- - Likes:boys, horses, girls, playing the guitar, writing music,singing, and hanging out with her friends
- - Dislikes:bullies, people who make fun of her, horse haters, and people who make fun of her friends and the people she loves.
- - Goals: to ride in the Rolex, get a boyfriend or a girlfriend and become a better rider
- - Fears:lossing her friends, getting her heart broken and not being able to ride in the Rolex
- - Habits: getting worried a lot
- - Personality:

Positives

• friendly
  
• caring
  
• funny
  
• a great friend
  
• doens't lie
  
• loves her horses
  
  
  Negatives
  
  
  • worries about her friends
    
  • trains to hard
    
  • worries too much
    
  • she sometimes blames herself
    
  • a little competitive
    
  • can be alittle too serious
    
  
  

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- - Father: Zach Smith, 50,Horse trainer
- - Mother: Britney Smith, 49, horse trainer
- - Siblings: Max Smith, 21,show rider and horse trainer
- - Other relationships:none
- - History:

Rachel grew up in Louisville, Kentucky where she grew up on a showing stable with her twin brother, Max. Which was owned by her parents and her parents also taught the lessons sometimes. She fell in love with three day eventing when she watched her parents work their horses. She fell in love with dressage for its moment and for its grace. She fell in love with Cross country for its speed, agility, and calculations. She fell in love with show jumping because she loved the fell of taking a horse over a jump. Her first horse was a thoroughbred eventer and she loved taking the horse to competitions. When it came down to riding horses, she can handle young horses and older horses. She continues to show horses and she dated more girls then she dated guys. She started to train horses during high school and helped her parents train their riders and their horses. She sometimes trained horses for people who were boarding their horse at her family’s stable.

After all of her training and hard work for her very first three day event competition, it finally paid off. She won her first big three day eventing competition when she was in middle school and she was happy the whole day. So, she began to train hard and work hard for her next competiton. But the horse she rode in her next competition had a tendency of refusing the jump, sometimes and she lost the competition due to the fact that she got a lot of faults. She was frusterated but she soon realized that ther is always next time. So, she trained even harder and work harder to do better at the next competition. When her third competition came, she ended up getting second place, which to her is an accomplishment from all of her hard work and it paid off in the end.

When she entered middle school she began to wonder why she not only likes guys but girls as well. She became bisexual. When she was in eighth grade she dated a girl for about a year and then broke up before high school started. She dated on girl during high school but found out that she was cheating on her with another girl and so they broke up. She hopes to find a girl or a guy who loves her for who she is and what she is like.

After college she left home and came to Caledon, Ontario. She hopes to continue her horse training in a different town and hopes to gain new experience from this. She also hopes to continue to train and ride horses. When she is here in her new home, she hopes go get better in dressage because that tends to be her weakest of the three. She hopes to train and ride her future horse for the Rolex Kentucky.

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- - Your name:kyogirl
- - Your age:20
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[jessica owens]

Rachel seems like a very interesting character, but her application just needs some small tweeks before she is accepted. She needs more likes/dislikes as well as more negative personality traits- I should really get a sense of your character as a whole. Your history wording is kind of iffy, and it seems like you just crammed everything in. Write it in more paragraphs and expand it, especially if you want to be a trainer. I need to know her riding accomplishments, fails, challenges, etc. Also she does not get to bring a horse to Wynfield. The Rolex is eventing, so if she wants to get there you need to explain in her history why she is coaching show jumping and not at an eventing barn.

Your character looks exciting and I can't wait to roleplay with you, but until these are fixed you're application is pending

[kyogirl]

I fixed it

[jessica owens]

I hate to be picky, because I do get a better sense of her but she still needs a bit more, some problems she has had in the past, some success stories. See my character, Jessica Owens, for an example. Also your sentance structure needs some work, so please edit your history as well to make it flow. This can be hard to figure out and takes some time, but if you make the history more descriptive and attempt to make it flow I will happily accept this. Try splitting it into paragraphs based on certain things instead of time periods. So, paragraph 1) How she got into horses/childhood/relationship with her parents. 2) Highlights and Failures in the horse world. 3) her sexual orientation details 4) why she is here now, why she has chosen to do show jumping and not eventing.

Thankyou for being so willing to edit your application, it means a lot

[kyogirl]

I fixed it

[jessica owens]

two words- be specific. She won a competition, she lost a competition. Here's an example: So and so spent hours traing as a kid, working with the top coaches in order to perfect her technique. Her first horse Buttercup had a reputation for being a bit of a handful and knocked so and so into the dirt what felt like a million times. At there first competition Cuttercup ran out and Rachel crashed at the base of a water ump- brusing her entire body. Rachel was extremely sore but she was determinded to make up for her loss, so she bit her lip and ignored the pain as she made a comeback by having a clear showjumping round. (bo not copy and paste that into your application). Again, editing is key. If you edit this and add a smidge more detail I will accept it- but sentances do not start with which, and it should be 'movements'. There is more, but I trust you can find them.

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[kyogirl]

I fixed it

[jessica owens]

Due to the fact you have improved this greatly your application to Wynfield Equestrain has been accepted. However, when posting please spell check your posts. You will be assigned a horse shortly.

[jessica owens]

You have been assigned Ramirro to ride for the 2011 show season